You have to receive some lemons, to make some lemonade. You must sleep in your bed, once it's been made. You cannot see the rainbow, until you've seen the rain, but why's the light in the tunnel have to be a stupid train?
Ok, you poem's meter is all over the place. It is 8-6-6-4-7-6-8-7.
Here is the way I would write it (for what it's worth).
You must receive some lemons for you to make pink lemonade. After you’ve slept in your own bed You are not up until it is made. You cannot see any rainbow Until the sun shines through the rain. But why’s that light in the tunnel Turn out to be a stupid train?
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Ok, you poem's meter is all over the place. It is 8-6-6-4-7-6-8-7.
Here is the way I would write it (for what it's worth).
You must receive some lemons
for you to make pink lemonade.
After you’ve slept in your own bed
You are not up until it is made.
You cannot see any rainbow
Until the sun shines through the rain.
But why’s that light in the tunnel
Turn out to be a stupid train?
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